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Twilight rolled over in bed, the purple mare's body slowly stretching in her half-awake daze as she murmured gently to herself. As her eyes closed once more to enjoy those last few moments of blissful sleep, her forehooves dug into the bed sheets before bumping into something familiar. A wistful smile crossed her muzzle as she smiled, reaching forward with her muzzle as her nostrils began to sniff her favorite scent. Opening her eyes slowly, Twilight saw Trixie's half awake eyes staring back into hers as a sleepy smile crosses the blue unicorn's muzzle.

"Mmm, good morning, sleepyhead..." Trixie's usual defenses by now were dropped when around Twilight, but her voice still carried that slightly haughty tone to it at times. It wasn't intentional most the time for her, it's just that the magician unicorn had her stage persona so ingrained into her normal psyche. "It's about time you woke up..."

Twilight gave a slow smile as she reached out, her right hoof touching Trixie's face lightly as her own smile deepened. "Mmm, Trixie... I had such a wonderful dream about you last night. Just you and me, by ourselves, traveling the countryside together performing like you promised the last time you visited."

Trixie let out a light laugh as she leaned forward, nuzzling the purple unicorn's muzzle with her own before nibbling her way up to Twilight's ear. She then began to whisper into the thin equine ear, her words caressing the inside of this sensitive place with the heat of her breath. "Mmm, Twilight... What do you mean? I promised I'd never leave you again! Now, stop being such a neigh-sayer and get up... You need to run thru the shower before me so you still have some hot water left. You know it takes me much longer due to having to leave all my mane conditioner in! After all, the greatest and most powerful stage performer in Equestria has to look her best!"

A shudder ran over Twilight's body, feeling the hot breath in her ear as she bit her lower lip in anticipation. Swallowing softly, she turned her head towards Trixie's face, their eyes locking before she darted in to give the blue mare's lips a gentle peck. "Mmmm, do I have to? Can't we just stay in bed today?"

Trixie shook her head and made a shooing motion with her forehooves. "No, or we'll never get out of bed, just like yesterday! Now you go get into the shower and then go make some tea... I'll be down later after my shower."

Twilight let out an exasperated sigh as she slowly rose up out of bed. "All right, but you owe me for getting out of bed, Trixie." Rising to her hooves, the violet unicorn trotted out of bed before turning her head. As she looked over her right shoulder at the bed, Twilight gave an impish grin as she batted her eyelashes. "You know I love you, Trixie..."

The blue unicorn's cheeks blushed as she nodded. "I know, Twilight... And I love you, too. Now hurry up and get into the shower, before I have to swat your flank into it!" Grinning, the blue unicorn raised a hoof in a teasing manner as if reaching over for the newspaper on the bedside table as if to roll it up.

Twilight let out a squeal as she shook her head. "No-no-no-no! I'm going, I'm going! See you downstairs!" Giggling to herself, Twilight galloped out of her bedroom towards the bathroom. As her hooves shook the wooden floors of the tree house, a large photo was shaken off the bedspreads, the thin paper catching the air as it fell picture-side down on the floor next to Twilight's bed.

After a refreshing shower, Twilight trotted towards the bedroom to tell Trixie the bath room was free. She paused, looking in to see the blue unicorn no where in sight. Looking around, Twilight soon found her blue unicorn crawled halfway under the bed as if searching for something. "Trixie..." Twilight began as her right forehoof started to impatiently tap on the floor. "Whatever are you doing under there?"

"Oh, Twilight," the slightly embarrassed tone evident in the blue mare's voice with her head under the bed. "It's just... The photo fell down off the bed, and I got stuck down here trying to get it back. Would you be a dear and help me out of this mess, please?"

Shaking her head in disbelief, Twilight's horn came alight with magical energies as she gently pulled Trixie from under the bed. Walking over, Twilight dusted her off with her hooves as she sighed. "Oh, what am I going to do with you? What if any of your fans saw you so dishevelled! You'd be on the cover of all the tabloids!"

Trixie's blush still burned on her cheeks as she pouted. "But... I thought you were my biggest fan, Twilight?" Turning her head away, the other unicorn slipped easily into the act of being hurt from all her years on the stage.

Twilight let out an exasperated sigh before shaking her head. "Oh, Trix... You know I am, and you know I was only kidding. Now, come on, my favorite magician. Go get yourself cleaned up, and then come meet me downstairs, please?"

Trixie let out a depressed sigh, but the smile upon her muzzle lips showed plainly that the sigh was still part of the act. "Oh, all right," Trixie began in a pouting tone of voice. "But only because you said please."

Twilight leaned forward, giving the other unicorn's brow a gentle kiss right under her horn as she smiled. "That's better, love. I'll see you downstairs." Giving a soft smile towards Trixie, Twilight trotted out of the bedroom with a final smiling glance over her shoulder at the mare she loved sitting atop the bedspreads. Then, turning away, she finally began to trot towards the stairs.

As Twilight trotted down the stairs, she was surprised to see Spike already awake and busy cleaning in the kitchen. "Oh Spike!" she began in a cheerful tone. "What are you doing up already?"

The dragon froze, nearly dropping the plate he had been washing as he turned towards the sound of the cheerful voice with a shocked look upon his face. "T-Twilight! What... You're finally out of bed? I mean, I'm glad to see you finally up and trotting around, but it's been over a week since you left it!"

Twilight shook her head and sighed deeply. "I know, I know... But Trixie and I decided we finally had to get out of bed."

Spike winced slightly, the purple dragon looking a bit queasy as he fumbled to find just the right words to say. "Ah, Twilight... You... I mean, what do you mean by that? Don't you remember what happened?"

Twilight turned, looking at the baby dragon as a frown crossed her muzzle. "What do you mean, Spike?"

The dragon sighed, fearful at the fact it seemed it was going to be another one of those days. "Well, you know... About Trixie. I mean, she-"

"Is upstairs taking a shower." Twilight cut in with a firm tone as she looked at the dragon with cross eyes. Then, as quickly as the glare crossed her face, it was gone. "Oh, but I want to get something nice for Trixie, Spike. Why don't you run to Sugarcube Corner and pick us all up something sweet for breakfast, all right?"

Spike swallowed nervously as he shook his head. "Whatever you say, Twilight... Should, I mean... Do you think you want to talk to your friends today? They've all... I mean, we've all been really worried for you, Twilight. We know how hard this must be for you, and we all just wish you'd let us in to help you."

Twilight turned towards the dragon, her happy demeanor faltering for a moment before she gives a light laugh. "Okay, Spike! If you want, you can call up my friends and we'll have a good ol' Pinkie Pie party later this afternoon. Is that fair?"

Spike nodded and began to scurry towards the door. "Thanks, Twilight!" He paused at the door as he opened it, the baby dragon looking over his shoulder as he smiled nervously. "You... You'll be okay while I'm gone, right? You won't do anything crazy, right?"

Twilight gave Spike a firm glare as she shook her head. "Spike! I'm shocked you'd even hint at something like that! I'm just going to go curl up in bed with a few research books while waiting for Trixie to finish her shower, and then we'll both come downstairs by the time you and our friends get back, okay?"

Spike shook his head sadly before turning to leave. "All right Twilight, whatever you say... But I'm bringing your friends back this time, because you told me to. So please let them help you this time..." With those words, Spike closed the door to the library as he headed out to gather everypony.

As Spike left, a cold shudder ran over Twilight's body. "Oooh, Spike, so melodramatic." Turning to trot up the stairs once more, the purple unicorn stepped carefully between the plates of moldy, uneaten food as she worked her way towards her room again. Opening the door, the bedroom was in shambles as dirty clothes, used crumpled tissues and newspapers were strewn across the floor. Trotting towards the bed, Twilight sighed. "Trixie, you wouldn't believe how strange Spike was acting this morning!"

Sitting on the bed, the unicorn looked over to the bedside table to see the same yellowing newspaper she'd been re-reading for the past few weeks. The cover photo was of a collapsed stage and the bold-faced headline read, 'FREAK WIND STORM CAUSES PYROTECHNIC MISFIRE, KILLING STAGE MAGICIAN'.

Looking away, the unicorn's magic picked up the photo laying atop her bedspreads as she sighed. "I know you're dead, Trixie. I know it every minute of every day. But I still love you..." The tears threatened to bust from her eyes one more as Twilight stared at the photo of her and Trixie on the day they announced their engagement to their friends-the two of them hugging and laughing the night before Trixie left to go on tour.

Laying the photo back on the bed, Twilight shook her head in frustration as she fought the onslaught of tears threatening to spill from her eyes. "Why can't they all just let me have this... This one moment when we're still back together. When the dreams are still fresh in my heart, and I can be happy again." Laying down atop her bed again, the unicorn's forelegs reached out to the photo to clutch it to her chest as she felt the tears begin to flow like waterfalls down her face once more.
This is another of my 'twist' stories, and this one WILL make a LOT of you cry! You have been warned! Twixie with a twist, so enjoy!

Well, not enjoy, but... Um... Yeah... Let me prepare for incoming hate & rage.
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wolfwaker101 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014
Waaaaahhhh! That's so sad.
rilator Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
man while never really was twixie fan i am mad at you now! first you get me intrigued and then im like 'oh god, please no!' and bam turns out trixies dead? i am so mad at you! (dont worry, ill forget soon enough.)
Niklas123dk Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm in tears and i smile, but it's because i'm tired strange enough. And this fic didn't help much, now tears stuck.

This fic page was... Something... No, good enough for me.
Trinity-Alchemist Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
At first I was like "aww, Twixie truly is the best :)"

And then I was like "oh god, please don't be suggesting what I think he's suggesting"

And now I'm crying :(
Jozilla877 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012
Somebody get me a phoenix down, a senzu, a set of red candles, 3 pints of blood and a shovel!
Roamingmoon Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow all happy then you go and make me cry good job no sarcasm
SecretLaser Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
no tears. A bit funny. Only a bit.
Xevenous Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011

zyrin Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Damn. . .kinda got the idea of what happened when Spike was talking, but still. . .very beautifully written.
jamesbuffett Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011
Ow. My heart.
HNNNNNGHHH Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This seriously made me cry!!!!!!!!!! Oh well........
Even though this story made me think that you are bashing Twixie shipping, i won't hate you for it.
Besides the errors and such, this could be a great story.
I wish that I could just go there and hug Twilight. Looks like she could really use one.
RinzlerABC Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011  Student Writer
Apart from critiqueing the grammar, punctuation, use of english, repetitive wording, spelling etc. which I won't do now, mainly because othe people told you the same thing, I will actually review the story. Heads up though, it won't be a pleasant one. Also, people <spoiler alert>
The story may involve Twilight and Trixie as characters, but you got their personalities all wrong! Trixie is the one who is impulsive and acts before thinking. Twilight is organised, thinks four times before doing anything, and apart from all that, she is the one who bosses people around, even though sometimes it is hardly noticable. Their names might be Twilight and Trixie, but they aren't the ones the comunity knows.
There is a bit of ambiguity due to the fact I didnt quite understand what Twilight was doing, rememorising in the present or daydreaming what would have been if she was still alive. In both cases, you failed to depict most of their feelings.
There are a number of awkward moments, which, if the love was true, should not have existed there. They should be replaced by shyness, some hesitation, but mostly proving, again, the love was true. Jokes between the two are non-existant, Twi and Trixie being all serious, nothing pleasant between them. This is also a mistake, due to the fact that a healthy relationship involves friednship too.
However, the finishing blow was quite impressive. Although you NEVER say "I know you're dead, Trixie. I know it every minute of every day. But I still love you..." in that state of trauma. She was probably in denial or acceptance, never both at once, not at the degree you made it look like.
Because I am by now depicted as a horrible person throwing mud at your fanfic with no apparent reason, even though i am trying to give some constructive critique, I will give you this: The idea is genius! Its building up could have been better, but as somebody else already said, I've seen worse.
Overall, I'll give you a 3/5 with indulgence, due to the fact the idea and the ending made think about many things going on for me. The points deducted are for the lack of feeling over the entire story, except for the last couple of paragraphs.
Sorry for wasting your time.
</spoiler alert>
Niklas123dk Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Community* Friendship* Just saying.
RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
Nah, not a waste. Constructive criticism is a good thing!
DPV111 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
Oh sorry for double post. Just wanted to suggest that a story like this might have more impact if written in the 2nd person.
DPV111 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
Eh. Not the worst I've seen done to either Twi or Trix.

Grief is just grief.
Ragnarokia Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It seemed so nice, but in the end, so upsetting. I really feel sorry for Twilight.
Crystal-Eclair Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
all i can say is you were lazy, i mean you spelt everything normally apart from Through, you used text language and said Thru, i mean, come on this is a story
RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011

preposition, adverb, adjective
an informal, simplified spelling of through.
Crystal-Eclair Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Still being lazy cause you couldn't be bothered typing out the whole word, you don't see it in novels or proper story books, you see it in texts on phones or IMs
Frostybrand Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011
ROY! Bad Roy. You know the rules, Trixie never uses 1st person referencing. 3rd person only. tisk tisk :3
RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011
Well, she sometimes drops it when not in performance mode...
Frostybrand Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011
*reads past 1 paragraph
o_O oooooooo, thats what you were getting at.
riflebrony10000 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i didn't cry, but it was sad. And after season 2 episode 3 I can totally see twi doing this
calum100 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011
Also, I just realized what Spike meant by "You... You'll be okay while I'm gone, right? You won't do anything crazy, right?"
calum100 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011
Wow... Im a guy and this made me cry... wow.
Hmorris15 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011
This is exactly what a good story should do to someone.
madman12000 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011

Amazing how she can balance her knowledge of the truth, and the fantasy she is living in, simultaneously. Only Twi, I guess.
strchsr Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
Well, didn't see that one coming up until the part where Spike was acting odd and then the talk of having to walk around moldy, uneaten food like Twilight's house was unkempt and she hadn't cleaned in a week. Or rather she had been eating it and having hallucinations?
Sir-Tristan Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011

I called it as soon as Spike showed up, but... it still doesn't make it any easier...
EricaC78 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This was pretty depressing, but very well written.
Dreadroberts Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
Lol I love your signiature Roy G Biv, its sooooo true.
tritos Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
you apply a nice amount of pressure to the drama, i like to think of the real twist being that Twilight wasn't deluding herself into thinking Trixie was still alive
seveshXhiro Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011
I..I'm not gonna lie I cried at the end. I really enjoyed the story and I felt really bad for Twilight. This is just.. <3 words can not describe.
CloudRunnerTeeny Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Student Writer
awe this story does a good job a conveying the characters feelings to the reader
Bmoreravens12 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011
Well, this was the saddest fan fiction I ever read. Even bubbles wasn't as sad as this. This made me cry, i'm not going to lie. I never cry. The last time I cried was when I watched the VMA's Kurt Cobain tribute. Congratulations, you made my love for Twixie stronger. I always tell myself I hate happy endings but sometimes I rethink that. In top of the saddest I ever read, this is one of the best I ever read. You instantly gain a watch from me. Even though I chose sadness I love this. Keep up the good work with other fics you write. This was amazing so the others must be.
qinop Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
So sad.
So sweet.
So hard and heavy and deep.
A job done - So good.
Paradox042 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2011
Well, I cried a little. I hope you're happy. Oh god, the more I think about the happy part in the beginning the sadder I get. And I keep going back to the happy part to cheer me up. Its an infinite cycle of sadness! Damn you Roy!
RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2011
Damn me to Pony Hell...?
randomjuicebox12345 Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
this confused the heck outta me
RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011
What confused you? Maybe I can help?
brony0ne Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
ok, now that Im no longer crying, (it took me a day or two XD) very good, and I love you soooooooo much, but i also hate you for making me cry. XP
RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2011
i got that a lot with this one...
brony0ne Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
XD, no wonder, you earned a watch, no, not a gold one
brony0ne Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Im traumatized, XD, but, these ponies they drive me to feel.
RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011
Awww, to traumatize you...
TheGigglingHyena Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Student Writer
This is beautiful. <3 I almost cried. Darn you, sensitivity!
Anyways, very well done, sir! I applaud you. :iconclapplz:
dragonfire9267 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011
I actually did cry... just a little.
And I'm a guy...

But I agree with the Hyena dude. Well done, dear chap.
RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011
Wow, thanks! I also noticed you're a slash fan, so thought you might care for :iconmlp-fim-yaoigroup:...
TheGigglingHyena Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Student Writer
Sure. <3
Oh, the pony yaoi group! I already watch it. Not a member, though. xD
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